Wednesday, December 1, 2010

Peer Edit

1. Beat Officer Chris Engle, who was the one to write Felt’s citation, agrees underage drinking will remain an issue in Pullman and that beat officers are important in helping control underage drinking.

2. WSU reported no homicides, two aggravated assaults, and several other incidents, according to the data.

3. “If it was not for financial aid,” Smith said, “Then I would have had a much harder time getting my bachelor’s degree; not to mention my master’s.”

4. Though the university is losing money, it is receiving applications from more potential students, Jones said.

5. The Whitman County housing market decreased 31 percent in the past year. (Shorten by five words)

6. As a 22-year-old student at Seattle University, Stephanie Marie did not know the different risk of having unprotected sex. (Correct and shorten by three words.)

7. The Washington State Liquor Control Board has banned Four Loko effective on Nov. 18. (Combine into one sentence and cut any unnecessary words.)

8. Despite criticism for its lack of change, the ban on cell phones while driving will eventually lower accident rates.

9. Police said they do not know who attended the party last month.

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